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Personal Statement Sample 1

Don’t Hope. Decide!

I was conditioned to think that my life revolved around great moments, until my father’s tragic train accident struck a devastating blow to the peace of our family. The accident occurred in the last days of my preparation for National College Entrance Exams. I spent a lot of time hoping that my father would beam his joyous smile for me again! So much did I hope that he would touch the side of my face and tell me everything was OK! When this did not happen, oppressive pain jarred my nerves. It distracted my attention and interrupted my concentration. I languished and got lost.

“Don’t Hope. Decide!” stated my steel-willed mother. She wiped away my tears and brought our shattered lives together. With concerted effort, we tried to put the accident behind us and start our new life. While unable to rewrite the past, we could change how we dealt with our inner fears. I went back to school to take part in that crucial exam, even though I had thoughts of giving up. I made it! Weeks later, my dream school, *** University, admitted me as an overachieving student. Living and studying in this elite school with top-notch colleagues has truly helped put the accident behind. It has allowed me to move forward and live up to my father’s expectation of what it means to be a successful man.

The unexpected misfortune expedited my maturity into adulthood with self-reliance and responsibility.

Into the World with a Nudge and a Flap

I took special pride in my academic excellence with an overall GAP of 3.45, ranking the top in our department. This was quite an accomplishment considering that a large amount of after-class time was spent making money to alleviate family financial burdens. Coming from the relative obscurity of a small town, I took leaps of faith all through my college years. Among the awards listed on my CV, the National Outstanding Student Scholarship is most worth mentioning due to its comprehensive nomination standards and highly selective criteria.

Our university places strong emphasis on students’ well-rounded development, in the belief that the younger generation is facing a more challenging world with global threats. While I had a lot of fun in the extracurricular activities, my communication and public speaking skills were honed, and my conscience as a global citizen was awakened. In 2008, I organized an earthquake relief project. We exchanged roughly 1,000 emails with similar organizations in the United States, and held a few videoconferences to hash out some practical means to support disaster stricken areas. In our cultural exchange programs, we invited students from our overseas sister university to our campus. This provided an outlet for everyone’s exploration of cross-border issues. The burst of creativity via the global-level cooperation was fascinating. I made some lifelong friends, domestic and overseas. The interactions with them formed my current perspectives, which I strive to make more reasonable, logical, and objective.

With an aptitude in music, I also made singing part of my life and was always heartened by this hobby. I led the tenor section in the University Choir. Winning the first place at National College Chorus Competition and standing in the long-lasting applause was one of my fondest moments in college.

Great March toward Progress

Time to apply my professional knowledge into real scenarios finally came when I was chosen as a summer intern by China’s top airplane design office in Shenyang, Liaoning province. I led a team of five students to participate in a number of different airplane parts programs. One of the tasks was to finish a radar system design including reliability modeling and prediction. The job duties ranged from evaluating the reliability of the radar system, to judging its mean time between failures (MTBF), and determining its working life. Instead of starting the project in a rash manner, we paid countless visits to other workshops to closely observe the veteran operations. Upon returning to the office fatigued, we held practically nonstop brainstorm meetings. Those meetings proved productive and inspiring. Wisdom was sparked because every one was free to talk and no one was judgmental. We were very encouraged by our interns’ passion and innovation.

Eventually the methods of Failure Mode Effect Analysis and Fault Tree Analysis to obtain the reliability diagram of the whole system took shape. With the diagram, we took a further bold step to construct a mathematical model to calculate the system reliability. Following the painstaking work of referring to handbooks and related materials, we acquired the data for all components and calculated the radar’s reliability based on the Bellcore and MIL217F Standards. On those scorching hot summer days, the electric tension of the air and languor was taking its toll on every one. As a team leader, I needed to maintain a relentless good nature and display positive emotion no matter how ragged I was feeling. We did a marvelous job by accurately computing the result of the radar system reliability and its value of MTBF, which greatly helped the understanding of its life and the intervals between failures. Not only did every one earn an ‘A’ for this internship program, we benefited more from the hands-on experience and accumulation of raw material for our graduation project. This project was concerned with reliability estimation for electronic devices and relevant software development.

After graduation and five rounds of hard-fought interviews, I secured a position with Huawei Technologies, popularly known as “China’s Cisco/Lucent.” This company is China’s best communications equipment provider. I surged to the front of the communications field as an industrial and reliability engineer at the testing center of the Research & Development Department. Possessing a competitive and perseverant nature, I accomplished my work in modeling, analyzing, and optimizing batch production screen strategy. My work reduced the production failure rate of an important integrated circuit board by one percent, which meant a decrease in maintenance costs of more than one hundred thousand dollars per year. I savored the rich, full joy of this meaningful research.

MIT and Me

While immersed in the research projects, I constantly felt the depth of the field of Mechanical Engineering. In an attempt to build a broad base for my pyramid of knowledge, I yearned to absorb knowledge at MIT so that my pyramid could go higher. After carefully browsing the materials of your Department of Mechanical Engineering, I considered it a place I would really fit. With an excellent faculty and state-of-the-art computer, manufacturing, and Human Factors laboratories, your department attracted me most with its one-on-one interaction between students and faculty, and your graduates’ excellent reputations among potential employers. If admitted, I would concentrate my dominant interest in creating a prototype of the new system, which integrates human intelligence and machines. There is no book to tell us how to do it. Under the guidance of my future instructor, I will be confident in implementing abstract theory of management systems engineering and textbook principles of applied operations research into “real street” applications.

Not looking for a life protected from pain and confusion, I look forward a rewarding future that requires a battle with obstacles. Having developed compassion, insight, and wisdom from my own trials, I am ready for the new journey to seek the truth and use my expertise to make the world a better place.

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Personal Statement Sample 2

“I SWEAR by Apollo the physician, and Aesculapius, and Health,…” Six years ago, at the registration hall of *** Medical School, *** University, a group of fresh students held the Hippocratic oath and repeated each sentence, with fists clenched. I was among them. Today, after long-term study and exploration, I am determined to dedicate my life to neuroscience – a hidden mystery and challenging field of science.

In college, I enjoyed myself in the pursuit of medical knowledge, and laid a solid academic foundation in clinical medicine. My overall GPA of 3.63 ranked me among the top 2% of the approximately 640 students in my department. Due to my excellent performance, you will find the attached CV ripe with numerous scholarships and honors for every semester.

Weaving together a keen interest in academic study and expert hands-on experience, I took the internship opportunity at the First Affiliated Hospital of *** University during my senior year. It helped me realize that, although modern medical science can solve a great many problems, it remains ineffectual with regard to some maladies, especially the CNS diseases. The treatment of some diseases, such as stroke and Alzheimer’s disease, has produced results that are far from satisfactory. I came to the conclusion that a genuinely qualified physician should have the ability to probe into the nature of diseases, not merely possess the requisite medical knowledge and skills.

The year of 2008 marked a watershed of my life.  Unlike many other students transitioning to their career stage with desirable pay and a secured future, I decided to continue in the academic field. It was a decision supported by my pure love for research and accompanied by my instructor’s encouragement. I chose to pursue a master’s degree at the Department of Anatomy of *** University, the first university in China that incorporated a Medical School. What fascinated me most was their research program in Injury and Repair of the Nervous System. After one year of course study, I participated in the project directed by Professor ***, The Experimental and Clinical Research on Injury and Repair of Peripheral Nerves. Significant attention was paid to the cultivation and improvement of experimental skills including immunohistochemistry, radioimmunoassay, in situ hybridization, electron microscopy technology, and others.

Because of my practiced experimental skills and enthusiasm for scientific research, I was honored to be chosen by Professor ***, Vice Dean of Medical School, as one of the main researchers in his project, Neuro-immunomodulation in Cerebral Ischemia, on which my graduate thesis was focused. My research aimed to find out the relationship between cerebral infarction and the expression of cytokine, explore the immunoloregulation mechanism of electroacupuncture (EA), and to observe the EA impacts on the level of cytokine. After those sleepless nights of data analysis, I discovered that IL-6 and TNF-αlevels in the brain and serum increased after cerebral ischemia and verified the hypothesis that EA could raise the expression of IL-6 and decrease the expression of TNF-α. This was the beauty of research! The inspiring findings were always wrapped in unexpected details. Out of this project, I acquired great knowledge not only about the advanced mental faculties of the human brain but also about the interaction between the nervous system and the immunological system. At the same time, my teamwork ability and the efficiency in real problem solving were greatly enhanced.

Meanwhile, another project of Professor ***, Neurobiology of Learning and Memory, also interested me. I participated in this project by getting involved in numerous experiments. Strange as it may appear, long hours in the lab rarely exhausted me, but elevated my mood instead. I studied the synaptic plasticity and the change of cellular morphology in hippocampal formation during spatial learning and memory. I enjoyed the process of inching ever closer to the final discovery. At first we established the animal model by using Morris water maze; then we planned to observe the expression of synaptophysin and glial fibrillary acidic protein(GFAP) in the hippocampus with immunohistochemical method; moreover, the positive synaptophysin-immunostaining particles under the subcellular level would be localized with immunoelectronic microscopic technique.

It was no accident that I was appointed as the editor of China Journal of Practical Medicine Hygiene as the sole graduate student in the whole editing team. I attributed this great acknowledgement to my four published papers in leading academic journals in China.

The more I learn about neuroscience, the more I realize that my knowledge is insufficient to unravel the secrets of the brain. This has prompted me to seek the most advanced knowledge and expertise at a top world university. *** University is, without doubt, the right place for me to pursue a Ph.D. degree and to fulfill my dream of becoming a top neuroscientist in China. Your graduate program deeply fascinates me because the Department of *****, with distinguished faculty, best-equipped laboratories, and nurturing academic atmosphere, plays a leading role in neuroscience research. Furthermore, my special research interests, the treatment of cerebral ischemic injury and the neural mechanism of learning and memory, are similar to the interests of some professors, such as Dr.***’s research in “******”, and Dr.***’s work in “******”.  Nothing has proved more challenging and intriguing to me than in-depth research in projects like these.

My motivation to succeed is reflected in my outstanding academic preparation, independent research capability, and vision for the future. These attributes, combined with my defined purpose and willingness to learn about all aspects of neuroscience, will guide my success as a doctoral student at *** University. Upon completing my proposed degree program, I will return to China with a conscious effort to increase the present research level in neuroscience, and use my professional knowledge to help the suffering.

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